I asked some friends to help me create a character for a story. I took their suggestions and wrote. Here are their contributions, followed by the story that came from them.
1. Answered: male
2. Partly answered: nickname "Mac"
still need first name.
3. Answered: Last name McAvoy
4. Answered: 50 years old
5. Answered: Hair turning silver with blue eyes.
6. Answered: Inner city Detroit
7. Answered: Recently widowed with a grandson to
look after
8. Answered: Sheriff/Law Enforcement Officer
9. Answered: Good trait- somewhat like Sheriff Andy
Taylor (Griffith)
10. Answered: Not-so-good trait - may cross the
line if needed (Longmire)
11. Answered: Problem - Lost wife after 27 years of
marriage.
12. Answered: How is the character dealing with the
problem - Sheriff Mac has not dealt with the death of his wife. However, his 3
year old grandson is forcing the issue. He begins to have flashbacks of his
wife and his daughter who also died Together in the car crash. The father of
the 3 year old has not been seen since learning of the pregnancy 4 years ago.
When all the questions are answered, my assignment
is to write a short story based on the character we have created together.
How Do I
Say Goodbye?
By Phil
Ruby
Sean “Mac”
McAvoy stood looking at his grandson, Jacob, whom he always called Jake. His
brow narrowed, his eyes got misty and his jaw clinched as he tried to answer the
questions the three-year-old boy had just asked. It had been six months since
the death of his Mac’s wife, Marianne, and his daughter, Laura, in the car
crash. Jake was Laura’s only child. Mac had not really dealt with the loss. He
threw himself into his work and drank himself to sleep most nights after Jake
went to bed. Despite the advice of all his men and others in the Sheriff’s
office, as well as the department’s counselor, Mac had not allowed himself to
go through the grieving process. He was stuck in the anger stage, internalizing
it until he had nearly destroyed his health. He moved quickly past the denial
stage, having been in law enforcement for thirty years. He had seen plenty of
death and knew there was no use in denying that it had ripped apart his own
family.
The
fifty-year-old Mac’s once reddish-blonde hair had almost all turned to silver.
His blue eyes glistened with the forming tears as he took his grandson firmly,
but gently by the shoulders.
The boy
spoke again, with a quiver in his voice, “Grandpa, are mommy and grandma ever
coming home?”
Maybe the
young Jake had a lot of his grandfather in him, getting stuck in the denial
stage of grief, even though the deaths were explained to him by the counselor
months before.
The
questions welled up in Mac’s chest and formed a hard lump right in the middle
of his gut. The questions were forcing Mac to move on through the stages of
grief. He asked himself, “What if I had seen the signs earlier?” and “Why
didn’t I react sooner?” He began to ask God to bring them back, knowing that
could not happen.
“Jake,”
Mac finally spoke, trying to control his voice, “Do you believe in God – in
heaven?”
“Mommy
told me about them,” Jake said, his eyes lighting up for a moment, “Heaven is a
place where nobody gets sick or hurt, and God takes care of them forever!” Then
Jake slumped, his eyes fell to the floor. “That’s where mommy and grandma are,
isn’t it? They are not coming back. Are they?”
Those
seven words in his grandfather’s question were all Jake needed to understand,
finally. Only his grandpa could settle the issue, no matter what anyone else
had told him. Jake had somehow, through the magic of youth, leaped all the way
to acceptance.
Mac,
however would still need some processing.
Seven months earlier
Mac McAvoy
sat as his desk in the Wayne County Sheriff’s Department in Detroit, Michigan.
He was in charge of the Special Response Team (SRT), responsible for the
handling of critical incidents and high-risk operations in a manner that
reduces the chance of violence, injury, or death. The day was routine so far,
with little for the specialized tactical officers except to keep up their
continued training on tactical weapons and scenarios, play cards and chew the
fat. Routine, that is, until the call came from the Sheriff that there was a
hostage situation on the west side of town in a hospital emergency room.
The team
rolled quickly, grabbing gear, suiting up with body armor and helmets, and
piling into the truck they called the “bread truck” unofficially. When they
arrived at the facility, it was surrounded by city police, other Sheriff units,
an FBI unit, and a town councilman asking too many questions.
“Get him
out of the way!” Mac yelled, pointing at the politician, “Where are the feds?”
Mac knew
that if the FBI was involved they would assume control of the situation and be
giving out orders. The federal agent met Mac halfway flashing his badge and
beginning to tell Mac what to do. Mac, a usually soft-spoken, calm individual
who didn’t like to yell at anyone could take on his aggressive side when
needed.
“Before
you start,” Mac interrupted, “We are the Wayne County SRT. We’re handling this.
We’ve been called in the sheriff, and if you have any questions or comments,
he’ll be here shortly, I’m sure.”
Mac’s
forcefulness took the agent by surprise, as he stepped back for a moment to
gather his thoughts. This was obviously a young agent on his first, or one of
his first, assignments. Mac moved on toward the city cars, asking the police
chief about the details of the situation.
We have
two men with semi-automatic handguns, two each, I believe,” said the chief,
Robert Donovan, “and loaded down with clips. They entered the ER shortly after
noon demanding to remove a gunshot victim from the premises. They thought they
were going to get in and out with him before any law enforcement showed up, it
seems. They faced resistance from one very tough lady, the head nurse.”
“My wife,”
Mac said nodding his head, “Has she…has anyone been hurt?”
“There has
been no gunfire so far,” Robert said, “but when we had one of the armed men on
the phone earlier I heard some of the staff in the background screaming about
the men damaging some of the medical equipment and putting patients’ lives in
danger.”
“We have
maps of the building and my men are moving in now,” Mac said, “We’ll get this
thing over with and do it without anyone getting hurt.” Mac said it with the
confidence he always displayed. Whether he truly believed it or not was
anyone’s guess.
One month later
“It always
makes me nervous when you leave for work,” Marianne said, her arms around Mac’s
neck,” she gave him a kiss.
“Things
have been quiet for a while now,” Mac said, “ever since…”
“Ever
since you and your men came riding on your white horses and rescued me, and
everyone else at the hospital?” Marianne said smiling, “You know I never would
have imagined you’d be coming to see me at work!” She was trying to joke, but
she was afraid.
The two
men they took into custody without incident glared at Marianne on their way
out. One of them, called “Chalk” by the other, had said to her, “We’ve got
friends. They’ll be looking for you.” He was referring to the fact that
Marianne had detained them long enough for the police to arrive.
“Look,”
Mac said, “I know you’re worried, and I am too. That’s why my friends at DPD
have extra patrols in the neighborhood. Some of the guys are even coming by in
their off-duty hours to keep an eye on the house. Are you planning to go
anywhere today?”
“Laura and
I are going to shop for Jacob’s birthday party!” Marianne said excitedly, “He’s
turning three this coming Saturday, you know!”
“Let me
know where you are. I’ll try to get away and meet you two for lunch,” Mac said
with a smile, “Jake’s at Amy’s, I assume?”
“Yes,”
Marianne nodded, “He begged me to go. I think your sister would keep him if we
let her. He plays so well with Bradley!”
Another
kiss, and Mac was out the door. Marianne looked out, up and down the street,
and waved at Fred, the off-duty cop that Mac had gotten to follow her if she
went anywhere. The two who had held the ER staff and patients hostage a month
before were behind bars, but they had ties to a local drug gang, and had
threatened Mac’s wife. He wasn’t taking any chances.
On his way
up the street, Mac noticed a car moving slowly. He took note, but it was a
late-model car and the two men inside were dressed in casual business attire,
and going by he saw a laptop and some papers in the back seat. “Probably
insurance salesmen or realtors,” he thought to himself. He glanced into his
rear-view to make sure Fred was still watching.
Noon
Mac’s
phone rang. “That must be the gals telling me where to meet them for lunch,”
Mac said to a couple of his team sitting nearby. “Hello!”
“Dad!” the
voice on the other end was shaking and he heard sobs.
“Laura!”
Mac said, “What’s wrong?!”
“We’ve
been in a bad car crash! I’ve called 911!” Laura said, her voice getting weaker
as she spoke, “Dad! Mom’s not breathing! I’m bleeding! Trapped in the car!”
Mac could
not speak at first. He was gathering his thoughts. Ordinarily he would have
quizzed about location and informed the main office about the call immediately.
This was not ordinary. This was his daughter, and his wife.
“Dad,”
Laura said, her voice trailing, “If I don’t make it,”
“Stop
that!” Mac said firmly, “You hang on! They’re coming to help you!”
“Take care
of Ja….” Silence
Mac called
out over and over, but there was no response. He contacted the 911 center,
found out the location of the crash and headed there as quickly as possible.
The ambulances, fire department and city police were on the scene. The bodies
of Mac’s wife and daughter were being put into separate ambulances, pronounced
dead at the crash. Marianne’s car was over a small embankment, piled up against
a large concrete pillar that supported the Interstate Highway just overhead.
There was no sign of skid marks nor evidence of another vehicle involvement. It
looked to the detectives like a single car accident. It was concluded that the
driver, Mac’s wife, must have been distracted and ran off the road, killing
both the occupants of the vehicle.
Mac could
not get the fact out of his head that the perpetrator at the hospital ER had
threatened his wife. He spent the next couple of months trying to convince the
prosecuting attorney to investigate the possibility that Marianne and Laura had
been run off the road by one of “Chalk’s” associates in crime. No evidence was
found, and Mac was ordered by a judge to cease and desist any attempts to
investigate further, in an official capacity as an officer of the Sheriff’s
Department of Wayne County. Mac tendered his resignation immediately upon
hearing that judgment, and began an investigation with the help of a private
detective. Spending his days talking to the PI and his nights in a drunken
stupor, Mac was missing meals, missing sleep, and missing his life.
Six months later
Mac looked
at his grandson, kissed him on the forehead, and said, “We’re going to be all
right.”
Four nights earlier
Mac had
gotten a tip from his private investigator that the one called “Chalk”,
nicknamed because of the chalk lines of dead bodies he had been responsible for
in the city, was released from jail along with his partner. Mac was also told
of their hiding location. He crept out late at night alone, drove to a block
away from where the assailants were supposedly hiding, and walked through
backyards to the house. He held a tactical flashlight and wore his holstered
9mm pistol at his side. He also had on his bullet proof vest. He crept near the
back door of the residence and began making noise, throwing rocks at the back
door and yelling.
Noises
came from inside the house. Mac stood in the alley, off the premises and
waited. The back door flew open, obviously kicked or shoved from inside. Then a
face slowly appeared, then another.
“Come on
out!” Mac called, shining his light at the back door, nearly blinding the two..
“Who are
you? What do you want?” one of them demanded.
“I am…or
was, the director of the Wayne County Sheriff’s Strategic Response Team,” Mac
shouted. “I also am…or was, the husband
of Marianne McAvoy and the father of Laura McAvoy. Do you know those names?”
“Sorry!”
the voice shouted, “I can’t help you.”
“You
ordered one of your boys to run them off the road out under the Interstate,”
Mac shouted. “They both died in the crash. Now I’m here to take you in for
conspiracy to commit murder.”
“By
yourself?” the voice called out. “And you are no longer with the sheriff’s
department? I’d say you’re out of luck, pal!”
Shots were
fired from the door and window out into the alley. In the next seconds, lights
blared from up and down the alley and bullets riddled the back of the house.
The SRT had come to back him up under the instructions of the new head. As Mac
stood there, never having fired a shot, he was approached by a few of his old
crew.
“They
fired the first shots, sir,” one of them said.
“You don’t
have to call me sir, anymore,” Mac said. “I’m not your boss anymore.”
“You will
always have my respect and admiration, sir,” the young man said, “and as far as
I’m concerned, you will always be ‘sir’ to me.”
Four days later
Mac looked
once more on his young grandson, who had already started to play with his toy
cars. He went outside, sat down on the back stoop, and cried. He cried until he
had no more tears. Then he looked up, and said, “God, how do I say goodbye?”